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2steps



Joined: 05 Sep 2005
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Location: Surrey
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 4:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Simon wrote:

I wouldn't expect a torrent of replies today though as I fear alot of the addicts have gone to (or are in) Wales. At least I am assuming that is why it is so quiet on here today.

(shall we raid the store cupboard )


ah, so that's why it's so quiet. hmm storecupboard it is then wonder if there's any chocolate in there?

cir3ngirl



Joined: 13 Aug 2006
Posts: 4846
Location: Cirencester
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 4:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Can we talk about them all as well?

Rob R



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Location: York
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 4:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

You'll also want to think of words/phrases (like 'hand made') that people will in websearches, when they are looking for what you have to offer, to draw them towards your site.

Penny Outskirts



Joined: 18 Sep 2005
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PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 5:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

cir3ngirl wrote:
Can we talk about them all as well?


I think we should - pass the biscuit tin 2steps..

(I'm really jealous, I want to be there too )

chez



Joined: 13 Aug 2006
Posts: 35935
Location: The Hive of the Uberbee, Quantock Hills, Somerset
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 5:26 pm    Post subject: Re: Website Wording Reply with quote
    

2steps wrote:
'I work with a variety of materials including..... '

I like this! And Rob R makes a good point - try and include the words you use in your Keywords in your text, I think it gives them more weight.

(*waves* I haven't gone to Builth, we went for a second viewing of the Fantastic Perfect House and have decided to put an offer in!)

sean
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Joined: 28 Oct 2004
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Location: North Devon
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 5:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Good luck. Is that the sealed bids jobby?

chez



Joined: 13 Aug 2006
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Location: The Hive of the Uberbee, Quantock Hills, Somerset
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 5:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

sean wrote:
Good luck. Is that the sealed bids jobby?

Yeah, same place, but apparently it's currently NOT going to sealed bids unless they have more interest. There's just us so far .... . Just sitting down with a spreadsheet now to work out what we think we should offer for it.

2steps



Joined: 05 Sep 2005
Posts: 5349
Location: Surrey
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 6:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

how about this?

'Welcome to Phoenix Moon, home of beautiful, handcrafted unique and very limited edition jewellery. All my jewellery is individually designed and handcrafted in the UK using semi precious gemstones, glass and silver. I create items with healing, spiritual and magical work in mind as well as pride jewellery for the gay and bisexual communities.

All items are one-off or limited pieces.

I am always happy to discuss any special requirments so if you would like an item in a different colour, size or style please email and I will do my best to help. I am also happy to create custom design pieces.

Though all items can be worn purely for decorative purposes the gemstones stones used all have useful healing or otherwise helpful properties, for example Hematite is used to aid circulatory problems or blood conditions such as anemia. The links page lists sources for further reading or if you'd prefer, email me and I will do my best to help you find an item to suit your needs.

chez



Joined: 13 Aug 2006
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Location: The Hive of the Uberbee, Quantock Hills, Somerset
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 6:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Great, really great. It sounds professional, friendly and approachable. And what about tweaking 'limited' to 'limited edition'? Sounds even more arty!

Gervase



Joined: 17 Nov 2004
Posts: 8655

PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 8:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Sounds good - polished yet approachable. Make sure your meta-tags reflect all that, by the way. They're what most search engines will hit upon.

RichardW



Joined: 24 Aug 2006
Posts: 8443
Location: Llyn Peninsular North Wales
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 9:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Chez wrote:
Great, really great. It sounds professional, friendly and approachable. And what about tweaking 'limited' to 'limited edition'? Sounds even more arty!


I would say that in todays market "limited edition" is marketing speak for we normaly can sell these in bulk (IE 100,000) but dont think these will sell that many so have only made 10,000. For the smaller market say that each one is unique or individual.

Justme

Maxwell Smart



Joined: 29 May 2005
Posts: 607
Location: London Town
PostPosted: Sat May 19, 07 9:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Rob R wrote:
You'll also want to think of words/phrases (like 'hand made') that people will in websearches, when they are looking for what you have to offer, to draw them towards your site.


This is very good advice. Make sure you also state what ever your focus is more than once on each page. Also make sure that you use alt tags for images and that you use the title tag. Be repetitive and use a range of words!

For example if you make jewellery, then consider something like.

"I am an Artisan Jeweller making handcrafted jewellery including necklaces, rings, pendants and braclets. By hand making my jewllery it allows me to.... "

Sorry written quickly and not that well but you get the idea.

There are multiple words in there describing what you do and everything you do is listed. Write an entire paragraph and use it on your homepage. Then make sure you repeat the relevant words for each page - for example a paragraph on your necklaces on a page on necklaces and a paragraph on bracelets on a page only on bracelets.

chez



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Location: The Hive of the Uberbee, Quantock Hills, Somerset
PostPosted: Sun May 20, 07 8:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

Justme wrote:
Chez wrote:
Great, really great. It sounds professional, friendly and approachable. And what about tweaking 'limited' to 'limited edition'? Sounds even more arty!


I would say that in todays market "limited edition" is marketing speak for we normaly can sell these in bulk (IE 100,000) but dont think these will sell that many so have only made 10,000. For the smaller market say that each one is unique or individual.

Justme

I was thinking more of things like signed prints etc. - that are truly 'limited edition'. But I can see your point .

2steps



Joined: 05 Sep 2005
Posts: 5349
Location: Surrey
PostPosted: Sun May 20, 07 12:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

thanks everyone

Maybe I could add a bit on the about page saying what I mean by limited. I'd be unlikely to make even 10 of something let alone 1000's

lettucewoman



Joined: 26 Sep 2006
Posts: 7834
Location: Tiptoe in the Forest!!
PostPosted: Sun May 20, 07 5:03 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
    

looks good 2steps - make sure you check the spelling though (required), and you say "will do my best" twice - you might want to think of another way to say it. Just my own preference - with my websites I try not to repeat myself, and I spell check like mad over and over again(dyslexic so know there will be loads!!!)

Good luck!

Oh and if you make your own findings (i do too) ...say so!

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